英文写作的改进举例

英文写作无论在国内考试还是留学考试中都占有很大的比例，但却一直是广大中国学生的弱项，在许多方面，体现出他们缺少语言运用的能力，包括词汇的理解，句式的变化等。这方面能力的培养需要日积月累。

现在，举出一些例子，大家要很好地体会这些句子改进前与改进后的变化，希望对同学们的写作有一点帮助。
1．the artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level．
改进：artists'work upgrades our civilization．
2．for example，you work in a big factory．
改进：suppose you work in a big factory．
3．you'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job．
改进：you'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career．
4．we willown nothing at all if we depend on luck．
改进：we will get nothing if we rely on luck．
5．he will get a higher salary to improve his living level．
改进：he willget a higher salary，thus improving his life．
6．their brain is still very young．
改进：they are still immature．
7．dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things．
改进： dissatisfaction impels people for the better．
8．they can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong．
改进：they cannot tell right from wrong．
9．it will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time．
改进：it will help children learn to make good use of time．
10．though it is not the best job，it afford to his life．
改进：though it is not the best job， he can make ends meet with it．
11．since people are always not satisfied with their present situation， they wantfurther development．
改进：since people are never satisfied with their status quo，they want further development．
12．the only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money．
改进：the only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money．
13．they like an active life but not a peaceful life．
改进：they like an active life rather than a peaceful one．
14．some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money．
改进：some cigarettes may cost even more．
15．it is very necessary to have more qualified scientists and technicians．
改进：qualified scientists and technicians are necessary．
16．they cannot think clearly．
改进：they cannot think straight．
17．money can improve their living standard．
改进：money can improve their life．
18．if a person only cares about money，this will lead him to be unhappy all his life．
改进：if a person only cares about money，he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life．
19．one purpose of education is to study the way in which to study later．
改进：one purpose of education is to learn to learn．
20．many parents arrange their children to go to learn piano．
改进：many parents send their children to piano classes．
21．eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finisheating without doing any washing．
改进：the best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after the meal．
22．smoking can help you relax your mind．
改进：cigarettes can help you relax．